Wednesday, October 10, 2007

Formal Writing

El Ambiente

En comunidad de la gente, tienen problemas con el ambiente. Uno problema en el ambiente es la bota de basura. La bota de basura no es buena. También las gentes abusan de la energía y destruyen muchos bosques. Otro problema es la contaminación. La contaminación es esta en el mundo. En mi comunidad, tienen basura en las calles. Basura en las calles es horrible por que basura es muy fea y malintencionada. Otro problema tienen en la comunidad es la contaminación en el rió. El rió tiene basura y otras cosas. Un problema tienen es derrame de petróleo en nuestro mar. Nuestro mar tiene basura, petróleo, y otros cosas. Nosotros necesitas mantener nuestro mar limpio. Necesitamos menos contaminación. Nuestro el ambiente es muy importante. El ambiente es importante por mi, mis amigos y mi familias futuro. Me gusta el ambiente.

Name: Date: Assignment:
Before writing, I think of what I know about the topic. I make a list of ideas, words, and phrases I might use.
yes

I organize my thoughts and ideas so that I can focus on one central idea.
yes

I choose ideas and examples that are appropriate for this culture.
yes

I make sure the writing has a definite beginning, middle, and end.
yes

I try to make my writing interesting.
yes

I write a first draft and then I reread and revise.
no

I check to make sure that my writing makes sense.
yes

I make sure the sentences relate to each other.
yes

I use familiar language structures so I know I am writing correctly.
yes

If I do not know a word, I use a word or phrase I do know.
yes

I make sure punctuation is correct according to the rules in this language.
yes

I check my spelling.
yes

I check my use of verb tenses (present, past, future, etc.).
yes

I check my use of gender and agreements (masculine, feminine, neuter).
yes

I ask someone who knows the language (classmate) to read my writing and give me feedback.
yes

I make sure the final copy is legible (handwritten or typed).
yes

What I think I did very well on in this assignment:
i related to the topic, and i made it interesting

What I think I need to focus/improve on next time:
I should write more

2 comments:

Anonymous said...

Student Writer:
Lacey
Student Reviewer:
Laura
Assignment:
Formal Writing 1
Date:
121707
The assignment is legible (written neatly or typed).
5

The central theme of the writing is clear.
5

The writing has a definite beginning, middle, and end.
5

The assignment is interesting to read.
5

There are enough details and examples to make the ideas understandable.
4

The sentences relate to each other.
5

The ideas are appropriate for the culture.
5

The sentence structures are overall correct and understandable.
5

The writer uses punctuation correctly.
5

The writer has checked spelling so that spelling is overall correct.
5

The writer uses verb tenses correctly.
5

The writer uses correct subject/verb agreements.
5

The writer uses gender agreements correctly.
5


What I really liked about this assignment:
terrifico

I have the following questions about your assignment:
what was goin through yo head when you wrote this fine piece of work?

Some suggestions for next time:
longer

Kristina said...

Student Writer:
Lacey
Student Reviewer:
Kristina
Assignment:
formal writing
Date:
12/17/07
The assignment is legible (written neatly or typed).
5

The central theme of the writing is clear.
5

The writing has a definite beginning, middle, and end.
5

The assignment is interesting to read.
4

There are enough details and examples to make the ideas understandable.
4

The sentences relate to each other.
5

The ideas are appropriate for the culture.
4

The sentence structures are overall correct and understandable.
5

The writer uses punctuation correctly.
4

The writer has checked spelling so that spelling is overall correct.
4

The writer uses verb tenses correctly.
5

The writer uses correct subject/verb agreements.
4

The writer uses gender agreements correctly.
5


What I really liked about this assignment:
it had a good subject


Some suggestions for next time:
make it longer